Elsie+Lock 2011

Wednesday 15 June 2011

Characters: John, Anton Journey: New Zealand, Australia.

John and Anton are best friends, they go to school together, play together and quite recently they had won together. Three weeks ago they had entered a coloring in competition together to help support there local hospital and they had won. The prize was a trip to Movie World in Australia and $500 spending cash each. But there was big problem, Their parents wouldn't let them go because they could get lost or hurt. “Please mum”, they asked for days until their parents finally gave in and let them go with the condition that they call them every morning and every night. So now they were on a Boeing 747 watching movies on their way to Sydney Australia. Once they had landed they had to spend an extra hour in Sydney airport once they had landed because their luggage had been accidentally put on another plane and when they had they were strait out and getting a taxi to the hotel they were staying in. It was an old rundown hotel in the middle of nowhere “This is way different than what I expected” john said “Yea I agree” they looked around there hotel it had a small old television, two single beds with no sheets and a small bathroom that only had a basin and a toilet with no shower or bath. “lets just try to get to sleep and in the morning we will go to the gold coast like it says here” said Anton reading the stapled pieces of paper that they had been given from a lady at the airport just before they left. It told them everything they were going to do from today and tommorow. As the two friends went to sleep they were both looking ford to the new hotel tommorow.

The two friends were woken up at 5o'clock by the sound of a monorail going past the hotels window, It wouldn't of been that loud but one of the bars on the outside of the window was loose and the vibrations was smashing it back and fourth and when the monorail had finally left the two friends got up and without talking got into the day cloths and packed there suitcases to leave as soon as they could. They had to take a taxi to the Gold Coast and once there taxi had finally got there it took them 4 hours to drive there.

At ten o’clock the two friends arrived at Movie world.

Tuesday 14 June 2011

Characters: John, Anton Journey: New Zealand, Australia.

John and Anton are best friends, they go to school together, play together and quite recently they had won together. Three weeks ago they had entered a coloring in competition together to help support there local hospital and they had won. The prize was a trip to Sydney Australia for a night before they went to the Gold Coast for two more nights, and on top of that they got $500 spending cash each. But there was big problem, Their parents wouldn't let them go because they could get lost or hurt. “Please mum”, they asked for days until their parents finally gave in and let them go with the condition that they call them every morning and every night. So now they were on a Boeing 747 watching movies on their way to Sydney Australia. Once they had landed they had to spend an extra hour in Sydney airport once they had landed because their luggage had been accidentally put on another plane and when they had they were strait out and getting a taxi to the hotel they were staying in. It was an old rundown hotel in the middle of nowhere “This is way different than what I expected” john said “Yea I agree” they looked around there hotel it had a small old television, two single beds with no sheets and a small bathroom that only had a basin and a toilet with no shower or bath. “lets just try to get to sleep and in the morning we will go to the gold coast like it says here” said Anton reading the stapled pieces of paper that they had been given from a lady at the airport just before they left. It told them everything they were going to do from the first day they got in Australia to the last day in three days. As the two friends went to sleep they were both looking ford to the new hotel tommorow.

The two friends were woken up at 6 oclock by the sound of a monorail going past the hotels window, It wouldn't of been that loud but one of the bars on the outside of the window was loose and the vibrations was smashing it back and fourth and when the monorail had finally left the two friends got up and without talking got into the day cloths and packed there suitcases to leave as soon as they could.

Monday 30 May 2011

Characters: John, Anton Journey: New Zealand, Australia.

John and Anton were best friends, they went to school together, played together and quite recently they had won together. Three weeks ago they had entered a coloring in competition together to help support there local hospital and they had won. The prize was a trip to Australia and $500 spending cash each. But there was big problem, Their parents wouldn't let them go because they could get lost or hurt. “Please mum”, they asked for days until their parents finally gave in and let them go with the condition that they call them every morning and every night. So now they were on a Boeing 747 watching movies on their way to Sydney Australia. Once they had landed they had to spend an extra hour in Sydney airport once they had landed because their luggage had been accidentally put on another plane and when they had they were strait out and getting a taxi to the hotel they were staying in. It was an old rundown hotel in the middle of chinatown “This is way different than what I expected” john said “yea I agree” I thought this was a five star hotel.

Nice writing it could have some more writing it has good punctuation Harrison